Clouds so low
sometimes it’s hard to breathe
light is fading
or
is the sky falling too.
Eyes watching me
as I watch them swim
A spider
out of place
shifting grains
did I break it’s web
or,
did it catch me
within its spin of
wonder thread.
Weeds choke this land I love
as the sea spews forth her
waste upon the shore
Mountains
I have climbed
now dry, rot and, stinking
But…
nature does what
nature is
and
not even wishful thinking
can stop those waves from
reaching out to clutch
my heart with salt
embracing kiss.
The sun is up there
…somewhere.
I saw her try to flash a smile
for a little while, ’til she too
gave up the ghost and
was gone as an army
of snow clouds
gathered at a pace
Was it the thrill of it all
for them
or
did she leave willing, and now
she’s smiling upon someone
else’s face.
Clouds above my eyes
and…
if the sky should fall
could I still breathe.
~*~
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*A little somber maybe but, (I feel is) apt today
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I love the tone of this.
especially LOVE the ending, Bren! a glorious poem!!!
♥
What you saw above and around you were wonderful. Sombre, but still wonderful. I love this, I love your descriptions.
I always flash you a smile, Bren … sometimes a smile filled with tears … but nonetheless a smile …. Love you, cat.
The melancholy scene brings forth so many images in my head… so many more questions of life and who really is in control of it all.
Melancholic sadness … bordering on tragedy … yet ‘if the sky should fall / could I still breathe’ ~ wondrous
gorgeous imagery!
Melancholy is a feeling to grow strong in. Sadness can be a way towards depression. This is melancholy.
Weeds choke this land I love
— great line
Well observed and well remembered. Certain lines stand out. E.G.
as the sea spews forth her
waste upon the shore
This is beautiful Bren … you described the control of nature so well … lovely !!!
Melencholy seeping thru, but not depressing. Clouds, the sky, speak louder than words sometimes for me. Thank you.
Clouds are almost hypnotic things to watch – so much going on and so many different ways of looking at them. And then I think of that Joni Mitchell song!
Weeds choke this land I love
as the sea spews forth her
waste upon the shore
I find that so profound and relevant. Great poem, Bren.
So many lovely descriptions, even if there is a slight melancholic embrace… quite beautiful.
Wow Bren. I think this is quite possibly my favorite of yours. Gorgeously detailed, the imagery is fantastic.
To be choked off would surely make on scoff, hard to breathe as all surround and come in on you, not a fun feeling at any zoo.
Bren, i want to quote this whole poem!
wonderful details, great imagery. you did a fantastic job.
Bren–beautiful, and yes, you can still breathe.
Beautiful imagery. The details are perfect.
Wow, the claustrophobia I feel in this poem, all is too low and close and otherwise gone! And you know you got me with the spider! Sometimes it feels as though I need only turn around to knock something off the shelf of its existence. If this voice is Chicken Little and the Sky is falling–I will have to grab a cloud to use as a sunscreen and then follow the sun to breathe!
“or did it catch me within its spin of wonder thread”….so beautiful. I love the conjecture about the waves and the sun……..great write, kiddo.
Lovely and heartfelt…I hope you are well dear ~
Well, the sun is not smiling in my part of the world either! I do hope she is smiling at someone else and that whoever that may be will appreciate it! I guess we will have to find our smiles from ‘non-heavenly bodies.’
nice…esp. loved the part with the spider…wonderfully everyday and magical at the same time…
Weeds choke this land I love
as the sea spews forth her
waste upon the shore…is a really cool concrete image bren…the sun trying to poke through, i like that and also how it gives mood to the scene as well…Was it the thrill of it all
for them
or
did she leave willing, and now
she’s smiling upon someone
else’s face….interesting question in there, which also sets the mood as well..i like…smiles.