I keep trying to leave
but you clutch at me and
do your best to keep me
in the deepness
of your sea.
Your heart cries out its song
in the rawness of your waves
as you trail along my shore
grasp me from behind
aware that you’re playing
my favourite tune
still, pulling on my ankles
like the strings of my heart
as I try my best to leave
yet, have such a need
to swim in you again.
Ohh….
so tempting you make it
for me to stay
To submit to your lure
let you have your way
but, I know I mustn’t
for you will drown me in the
very depths and needs of
that desire
and, if I sink beneath you
I may never find
the strength to swim
to shore
again.
~*~
© Daydreamertoo *All rights reserved
*Water, one of my most fav topics.
Shared with Magpie Tales #144 The artwork of Andrew Wyeth. Squall 1986
Love poem, painting, and sea. Your poem has such a longing about it.
I hear the siren’s song…
i love the depth of desire in this, Bren. i know people who feel this away about a lover and people who feel this way about the ocean… it works equally as well for both. wonderful!
♥
This is so good! I’m glad you’re a swimmer, too!
Oh sensuous stuff!
Anna :o]
I try my best to leave
yet, have such a need
to swim in you again.
Oh the temptation, risking being drowned. This really picked up a frenzied pace at the end!
Oh yes, powerfully strong- speaks to the heart and soul of all.
Wow, something of Jonah and The Whale , here, the rune Laguz springs to mind. Powerfully Felt, ! Thanks
Oh Bren…this was sensuous.
Wonderful poem.
Wow. You completely rocked this one. I love it.
=)
Your poem is so realistic but so ethereal and sensual at the same time. I love the way you wove your words and I thank you for sharing your talent for writing, Bren.
just fabulous..x
Top write that communicates well.
This seems to be quite a song. 🙂 Waves of emotion well illustrated.
Your words could be interpreted so many ways and all of them with passion.
this particular drowning doesn’t sound quite so awful. still, I can see and feel the danger here.
Lovely write, Bren 🙂
There may indeed be danger here …. sweet, impossible to resist. Nice write!!
That is some storm to be caught in the throes of. Quite the images you have painted. Well done!
This works wonderfully as it is written but also as a metaphor for a love relationship. Excellently written!
you have captured the allure but real drowning danger in some relationships…
I love Andrew Wyeth and this poem is a perfect companion to the image.
You gave a whole new meaning to drowning … well done !!
beautiful dreamer this poem is gorgeous, and so many women and men can relate to drowning in another’s need for us in their life.
Very powerful words.
Well, you manage to get onto a different tack! LOL
Beautifully written,and rather moving…
Sad and beautiful…
so hard not to give in to a pull like this!
Such drowning is sure fun, breath goes away but will come back sometime before the end of the day.
whew…is it hot in here or just me…sounds like me trying to get out of bed in the mornings….dang we would never make it to work….hahaha….yes whatfun that drowning could be bren
Captivating use of the prompt…