You can feel it like a blanket
spreading over you.
It’s electrifying!
Hot ‘n’ Humid.
Feel it….
the beat coming
in the heat.
Shivers up and down your spine
love by candlelight
you know it’s on the way
It’s in the air
tonight.
Your blood can feel it too
rhythmic flow
a way to go yet, but
you know it’s due.
Thunder in the mountains
stirs your beating heart.
Can you gaze upon the blazing knights
resist their steeds of flame
competing with the blue to win
your love.
You close your eyes and
feel the force
Their power’s breaking through.
In your wildest dreams your
hero has arrived and
fantasies are met.
The winner claims your soul
as the thunder clashes
and the lightening strikes
an arrow in your heart.
~*~
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Oh, I feel it, that was rapid! There is no sense of resistance here, and there shouldn’t be with such electric love. 🙂
wonderful. …. felt the electrifying effect……
WOW! It starts in the distance, a mere tapping into the veins and moves closer and closer: beat, heat, shivers . . . but the encounter with the storm is human, not a fantasy. Powerful in metaphor, image, action. Bravo!
Lovely and affecting poetry. This got me in deep trouble in real life, maybe it’s best explored in poetry. Your visceral write brought all those feelings flooding back, especially the sense of feeling my skin on fire.
Your writing is vivid, we can actually feel the storm approaching in all its fury.
One can definitely feel the impending storm. k.
blue for me =) vivid write =)
“Can you gaze upon the blazing knights
resist their steeds of flame
competing with the blue to win
your love”
.
For the likes of me, many a guy would want to do that. They sow their seeds hoping to catch the maiden of their dreams. Beautiful write Bren!
Hank
enjoyed the heady mix of heat, thunder and fantasy, all such powerful and seductive things!
As you say, electrifying Beautifully written and the layout helps the tension.
Feel it….
the beat coming
in the heat….whew nice… and you wove some real heat into this…smiles
Beautiful pic and the poem paints beautiful pics in my mind as well … wow …
love by candlelight
it’s giving me ideas 😉
“you know it’s due” is where I fell in without a chance of survival. this carried me away. i deeply and passionately love thunderstorms. thank you for this powerful string of phrases that so easily provoked me.
Well done. I really enjoyed this!
This is good, Bren. I could feel it. You used so many sensory words, and I loved, absolutely loved, the last stanza!!
There’s so many ways can affect us, our moods and thoughts. Rain is a time for reflection for me, and is often the most likely state of my soul at any one time. Your use ofvthis imagery for the storm and stress of love and its phases is well taken.
dang that is some sensuous storm you got brewing there….smiles….def a great description…the turn at the end caught me a bit but flowed really well…i love the power in a good storm…
To win would be a sin, so the cat will just play the game and dance around the strikes.
Yes, electrifying, love it
Love the heat and thundering words here ~ thank goodness we have the A/C to cool me ~
Have a good weekend Bren ~
Excellent write.
I was captured at the beginning with
You can feel it like a blanket
spreading over you.
.
It’s electrifying!
and stayed til the end.
Thank you !
Siggi in Downeast Maine