
Days unfold with ease now
…teasing
as their warmth touches
Inviting more participation
of life’s music cords within.
Winter played the
saddest notes
each one
crystal clear but
(for once)
I didn’t come undone in
the frozen wastelands
and
clouded vision cleared
as each tune changed
its reason.
Reflections arriving with spring.
A thousand butterflies
would take to flight
once upon a dream
but
I’m no longer in that
dizziness of free-fall.
No old hopes to dash
No dreams to rent asunder
upon such awakening.
I unwind in sunlit rays
of smoky light
and,
(when day is done)
will continue ‘neath a
backdrop of night’s
celestial sea.
~*~
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spring brings new hopes.
stunning prose.
“Winter played the
saddest notes
each one
crystal clear but
(for once)
I didn’t come undone in
the frozen wastelands”
I love this, can really relate, this Winter was like this for me, too.
Beautiful poem!
Such a beautiful piece of seasonal prose that tells it alll. Well said, Bre
I check in on James’ site on ocassion and see you and others have taken a prompt of his to write upon. I like yours alot and feel as though I have walked into his thoughts as he walks along.
This is such a beautiful piece. I love the ending.
In springtime, a new path, cleared from the rain!
Love, love this. Just gorgeous!
Beautifully rendered poem…I love this pic and feel the harmony in it and in your words…lovely & meditative..
Winter played the
saddest notes
each one
crystal clear but
(for once)
I didn’t come undone in
the frozen wastelands
and
clouded vision cleared
as each tune changed
its reason.
Well, if that isn’t beautiful I don’t know what is! It’s my favorite part of a poem that I took straight to heart. So very lovely.
I unwind in sunlit rays
of smoky light
and,
(when day is done)
will continue ‘neath a
backdrop of night’s
celestial sea…. wow…what a picture this paints…great!!
Love the way the rhythm of the poem slowly stirs into the day and then drops back to sleep again. Beautifully done.
Every where I’m reading about Spring… and seasons..
It feels great… and the subtle expressions in above lines makes it more great 🙂
“I unwind in sunlit rays
of smoky light
and
will continue ‘neath a
backdrop of night’s
celestial sea”
Yes, we unwind at our leisure in hazy light or darkness. We reserve moments when the lights are bright to go about our business with better chances of success! Great thinking Daydreamer!
Hank
~*~
Beautiful imagery througout….breathtaking 🙂
A lovely serenity that goes so well with the photo, each reflecting the other. K.
The poem transports me, as if in a dream. Ethereal.
Ah, winter. That verse hit me the most. Glad I don’t have to experience that sad note anymore…
Those thousand butterflies took me away into the world of your poetry, a wonderful place to visit. Thank you!
You sure walk through the mist and come out like a breeze putting everything at ease. Yes thankfully the winter, so far could still mess with us, was grand here in our land.
This has a really nice meditative quality to the way you unfold the person’s inner monologue. Very strong lines. This one, among many, stood out for me:
clouded vision cleared
as each tune changed
its reason.
Tunes changing reason has a very cool conceptual quality to it. I guess tunes change their reason, but its like thought and music are one. Cool idea.
I love this… the first two verses especially.
you described a lot of things in the picture
two senryu dedicated to the novelist
Lovely write Bren. We are lucky that the winter past was not so harsh and spring is finally here ~
Your composition took me there. I felt like I was there in the moment. Beautiful.
Wow, this was lovely and I had a felling or serenity as I read it.
I love how you’ve subtly woven music metaphors in with the changing of season to create a very special mood.
Seriously…we need a book from you! An entire collection for us to fall into. each and every visit is such a gift…and I am so sorry they have been so few and far between. This was just a wonderful write, Bren…as they ALWAYS are!
Real pearls in there:
“as each tune changed
its reason.”
“I’m no longer in that
dizziness of free-fall.”
I felt soothed after I read it. Thank you.
These are really nice descriptions:
“Days unfold with ease now
…teasing”
“A thousand butterflies
would take to flight
once upon a dream
but
I’m no longer in that
dizziness of free-fall”
“No dreams to rent asunder
upon such awakening”
Beautiful poem. I felt each word, like I was going through an emotional journey with you through seasons. Each element so well relates to the way we feel. Great job.
This beginning is quite simply ‘perfect’
“Days unfold with ease now
…teasing
as their warmth touches
Inviting more participation
of life’s music cords within.”
It captures so well the essence of this image, that I feel your were looking through my lens. Brilliant. James.
Old hopes, new hopes … We won’t give up on them … They are like unborn children, Bren … Ready to live. Love, cat.
dang lovely imagery in that last stanza bren…and the 100 butterflies…glad you did not come undone in winter…it can def be tough at times…but provides great contrast to the beauty of spring…
This is beautiful. This was a better winter than any in my memory. And indeed spring IS here. I love the last stanza and the mention of the ‘celestial sea.’ Yes!