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Beautiful woman, why so sad?
Is life so bad that you’d curl into a ball?
Petals fall through the air in minuscule pieces
sending sweetest fragrance to fill my
senses and, I am sensitive to
those tears you hide.
No, they are not trivial.
You make me want to cry
as I pick up these petals of
your heart and hold them
to my own for,
I too have known
such longing.
In naked truth sometimes we
find answers to questions
we ought never to have asked.
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Beautiful woman
I can sit and stare at your
splendid isolation or reach
out to soothe the loneliness
I too must bear.
Time will ease the ache as
memory fades all colour
from those fallen petals.
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Look into my eyes and trust that
hope will rise with just one step
into life’s new spring.
Let go the deviant stems.
The pain will end
and you and I will see that
roses bloom again.
~*~
© Daydreamertoo *All rights reserved
My thoughts on the picture.
Shared with Three word Wednesday CCLX11 Minuscule,Deviant,Trivial
With real Toads Triptych: Poetry In Three Parts
Beautiful Dreamer, O. you have penned a poignant poem full
of hope and temporary despair. The loneliness and desire
and the sympathy of another are all tied into a heartbreaking
garden of possiblities planting by tears shed.
Yes, a fine poem, bitter sweet, but burnished with hope.
Beautifully and sensitively done. Real curl-up-in-a-ball sadness is seldom trivial.
K
ABSOLUTELY GLORIOUS! So beautifully written, and carrying such compassion and hopefulness. I especially love
“trust that hope will rise
with just one step
into life’s new spring”.
This is perfection. Very uplifting.
Your poem has such a nice and bitter-sweet ring to it!
Best, M.
“In naked truth sometimes we
find answers to questions
we ought never to have asked”
This is definitely SO very true, Bren!
“Let go the deviant stems.”
Perfect way to describe letting go of worries and sorrows. Well done!
Phew, beautiful work, love the positive ending!
This is so touching and whispers compassion!
“Look into my eyes and trust that
hope will rise with just one step
into life’s new spring.”
I love this, the ending is wonderful~
What a lovely piece. Very special.
Disarming, empathetic, cathartic….great trip through life’s trials and tribulations and finding solace in an empathetic soul who can identify. Great take on the challenge…loved it.
what a beautiful poignant piece
“let go the deviant stems”
YES.
Gorgeous.
Wonderfully done, very well written…love the flow.
i love how you relate to her…your compassion…it def shows you heart bren…lovely verse
I second all of the above and also must add how powerful the final stanza is.
The pain will end indeed. But sometimes for some it doesn’t seem so and so they curl up in a ball and let their tears flow.
What a wonderful piece. The depth of emotion is strong and retained through all three sections.
‘deviant stems’ ..how they can infiltrate and drain colour from the petals of a rose..and yet in gentle hands..with gentle thoughts and words they can blossom again..and the woman can unfurl..wonderful piece..Jae
This is moving work.
This is a very beautiful poem. I like the fact that each part is different in length and stanza breaks, though the narrative voice remains the same. For me, these lines are central to the experience in that they reveal the depth of empathy expressed:
I too have known
such longing…I too must bear…
and how well that shared experience is brought full circle in the final three lines.