In the blink of waking eyes
I looked up and at once
could see both
night and day.
To the east, dawn arrived
riding across my sky
leaving clouds in its wake.
He rode a golden charriot
of flame which bore the
names Hope and Love
emblazoned on each fiery side.
To the right, the night
still wore her cloak
of a thousand eyes
filling the western sky
with her steady twinkling gaze.
Amazed at the jewelled gown
she wore
she shimmered as she moved
her body with such a
quiet grace.
And I knew I’d seen
that invisible cord
The cosmic tie at play.
The silent promise of
eternal love that lies
unbroken, between
night and day.
~*~
© Daydreamertoo *All rights Reserved
Hope this is a conflation. Night & Day are two very different things.
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Lovely!
Beautiful! Bren, you should do a poetry book!
“In the blink of waking eyes”
You had me right there. This was gorgeous work. I loved it from beginning to end. Thanks for the read!
– Nick @Whispers
Tis beautiful!
Anna :o]
i love the invisible cord and the spiritual bond.
silent promise
eternal love ….. lovd the phrases n metaphors u used !!!
wore her cloak
of a thousand eyes
filling the western sky
with her steady twinkling gaze.
Love your imagery here – beautiful words with mystical insight. Thank you for yet another lovely read!
Yes, I too responded to the spiritual chord tying your beautiful personifications together, lovely work.
Lovely!
Beautifully weaved imagery…true love is eternal,
it needs the balance, equally – darkness and light
A stunning piece Daydreamer
Eternal are night and day you say? What if you live in one of those places where it is always night or always day? Maybe they just don’t want to play and only come out every now and again or would that be a kind of divorce like men?..hahaha
very nicely done..night and day and the moment they melt into each other..love the images you’re weaving here..intense and vivid
Enjoyed this very much…
Peace,
Siggi in Downeast Maine
I could identify with the night – lvoe the twinkling gaze and jeweled gown part.
The personification of day and night draws quite a contrast and leaves this reader in the middle of that half-way place between the two. I love this poem.
Namaste……….cj
Delicious – that last stanza (and the whole reading of it was like a song)
I enjoy the spiritual thread you weave throughout this poem…the cosmic tie.
A lovely poem. Loved the subtle conflation between the riders and the images of night and day. Such a beautiful write.
I like the weaving of the night and day, tied with an invisible chord. For contrast, I would suggest an earthly chaotic scene.. maybe in the middle or the end. Yet all nature events are tied in together…just a thought.
Oh but I love this! The images, the words, the feel of it. Just wonderfully done!
Yes, I too believe love is eternal. The cord may be invisible, but it exists and is strong. And the jewelled crown, well that is for a life well lived. Beautiful poem, Daydreamer.
nice…some great imagery here…between night and day there exists a very magical time….of course you bring the spiritual as well in stunning display…smiles.