I felt your ache today
it matched my hearts own.
Pull the strings too tight
it might just cut me deep
then, see me bleed upon the
blade of your pain.
My sorrows were yours
and you are my tomorrows.
But the past is
dead and gone away.
Today the angels wept
for you
left their tears
as gifts of dew
glistening in the dawn
and my tomorrow woes may
never come.
So I took you in my arms
and held you close
(small comfort)
and you wept the tears
that I no longer cry
(another silent sigh).
Your breast heaves
the heaviness of hearts
that have no home.
I shared your pain today
we were together
but yet, remained
….alone.
~*~
© Daydreamer Too *All rights reserved
There are all kinds of loneliness, we can be in a long-term relationship yet, still feel utterly… alone. I wrote this a very long time ago but it was applicable to the Poets United Think Tank prompt this week.
Shared with Poets United Promt #57 Loneliness
This is very heartfelt and passionate, yet the emptiness is felt as well. Very well written.
I hope there is some comfort in being close if not together..a bold, sparing, touching piece..Jae
If written a long time ago, it has aged well. I thought it was something you wrote to the child you raise.
Those last two stanzas are superb, ddt.
Pamela
Oh this is really nicely done. I loved –
“Pull the strings too tight
it might just cut me deep
then, see me bleed upon the
blade of your pain.”
Nice writing! and perfect for this prompt. 🙂
“Today the angels wept
for you
left their tears
as gifts of dew” BEST LINE on here, love love love this 🙂
I simply loved it.
simply fantastic….
Very well written, capturing so much of the experience, the sadness and the awareness so painful in their intensity. Difficult subject and you handled it with the soft warm tenderness it deserves,
Elizabeth
Well done; you captured the mood and emotion~
Very nice feel the emotion
Thank you for stopping by “indigo’s flow”
To be alone with the people around….or to feel alone next to the beloved one…
You’ve expressed it so strongly using gorgeous words…
Beutifully done
Loved it !!
Regards…
Jyoti Mishra
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Loved your writing..
Fantastic projection of thoughts
First time here, and m glad I found your blog.
Regards…
Jyoti Mishra
it’s hard enough to feel alone in a crowd. it’s so much worse when you feel alone in a relationship of two.
perfect for the prompt. my heart hurts now.
This is absolutely beautiful. Written by one who has known pain and who knows how to comfort. I especially love “today the angels wept for you…” Beautifully written, heartfelt.
Daydreamer, it’s true, the loneliness while in a relationship. That was my first marriage, for sure. Your words are so carefully honed and honest, I really appreciated the sadness conveyed. Mine is about the irony of enjoying being lonely…
No loneliness seems as harsh as the disconnect that life can wedge between people…well said.
Daydreamer, you have written loneliness…..true loneliness….beautifully. Thank you.
Right now I’m in the middle of this, yesterday I was talking to a friend about how I have people around me but I feel alone, not a good thing
dang…this stings…together yet alone…i was there once…not a fun place to be…
Together, yet alone, is often the case. You illustrated that truth so well.
Intense and sad….
so touching and sad ~
A very strong piece of writing, which catches all of the internal emotions, as well as the tears.
A deep sadness and overwhelming loneliness.
Eileen
Very mystic and melancholy… perfect mood for the topic. I really like the ending.